Strangeo Forum |
 |
| 
Frogman
 
|
11/2/2012 | 4 |
Be warned, this short story is quite pessimistic. It runs in my veins after all...
This is meant to be a possible interpretation of Sphericus before the Lone Shee docks to the Arc. I'd imagine he'd be of some salvation. At least I'd hope he would.
?Her wings are marvellous!? He shouts into the microphone, the crowd is too loud for him to speak normally.
?Here she is! The Queen of Sphericus, observe how elegantly she walks! Her gait shows the magnificent genes of the grendels we love dearly! Oh how desperately I wish I was so fortunate to have my genes spliced with grendels...? The announcer?s voice continues on, as rehearsed as ever. I know for a fact if he was speaking from his mind his statement would be entirely different to this one.
Millions of norns are gathered in cages hanging from the ceiling, suspended by tightly wound wire cables. Once happy, the norns are now gifts for the newly crowned queen. Their little eyes are filled with terror as they look down at the object of their demise. I can only pity the poor things.
Deemed useless by the ever tyrannical Banshee norns have become simple toys and test subjects to a slew of different scientific experiments. In my home we all chatter about how lucky we are to be ettins. We aren?t at the top of the pyramid but we?re not as tragic as norns.
They fell from the hierarchy pretty much as soon as the banshee got their green claws on Sphericus. It started with the Shee being rounded up. There weren?t many deaths, luckily. Shee weren?t rebellious so they managed to be moulded into servants who do menial work for the bourgeoisie, who sit on their slowly rounding hides while the innocent sweat in their greasy fingers.
Yes, there is resentment in Eddie the Ettin?s voice. I have more than enough justification for it though. I could start with the fact that Eddie is clearly a masculine name and despite my biological sex I am by no means masculine. But matters are much more pressing, such as the millions of pairs of eyes that glisten with tears in the cage above me or the Jungle Grendels cowardice after the Horace incident that
happened era?s ago.
All the glitter and glamour are giving me turbulent headaches. They?re suckers for sequins these days. It is after all, idle distraction for the ever naive. The Shee have long gone from their fabulously ground breaking discoveries. They sit around in their pokey labs creating norns that sparkle or servant grendels that have six arms. Yes, norns were created for servitude but there was some extent of care put into their genetic construction, measures if you will to prevent the worst from happening. Even then, the Shee found them too endearing for their original purpose.
Idle distraction isn?t absent of us ettins either. The Banshee love their techonological pursuitsand from this came a plethora of the glorious things we compulsively haul to the desert. Gadgets. The thing that keeps the ettins in balance. If we do some vital button pushing for the upper castes we get to spend precious time playing ?hunt and haul? across the planet. Vital button pushing of course is a lighter term for brutal mutilation of innocent creatures.
I never liked my splicing job. It?s always felt like a crime. If the law were in my hands it would be. I think about the hundreds of grendels that have died at the hands of many Shee wanting to push themselves up the social ladder so desperately in a hope of recognition from the dreaded Banshee. This profession shouldn?t have to exist in this world. It never did before.
I stare at the spectacle in front of me. Madness. My hands shakily grip onto a lump of deathcap as I give one last gulp before I swallow my doom. I purse my lips.
But for some reason, I stop myself short...
|

Jessica
    

|
11/2/2012 | |
Rather pessimistic, but I rather like it! Creatures isn't all about perfectly happy-go-lucky Norns all the time. Some parts sent a shudder through me. Well done, though!
Discover Albia |
 Small Birb
Pann
   

|
11/2/2012 | |
Editing my comment cause it feels kinda silly.
Anyway, I really liked this story, it had a realistic view going on. I'd be pretty upset and just sickened if I saw what was happening to those poor norns, myself. I also really liked the alliteration in some of the words, really clever!
Great job on this!
Small bird who lives here sometimes, and wanders other times.
Got Creatures related content to share? Submit to Heck Yeah, Creatures!
Icon by gettehld on twitter!
|
 Tea Queen
Laura
    

|
11/2/2012 | |
I really like the way you've written this, Frogman! The Ettin's emotions, surrounding the situation he's in and his repulsion of it, are brutally honest and raw, and I think it's a refreshing change from the usual tone of Creatures fanfiction.
Have a round of applause! The unexpected twist in the ending really makes me want to read more, especially as we don't get many stories posted here!  |
 Lollipop Lord
C-Rex
    

|
11/3/2012 | |
Great job Frogman, most of my own stories are quite pessimistic, so I can see where you're going with this one. I also like how your protagonist is an Ettin.  |

Frogman
 
|
11/3/2012 | |
I wasn't anticipating this kind of approval, in reality a lot of my pessimism is met with some kind of ire. Then my writing is ignored too so to have both praised makes me a very happy person. Thank you. I really didn't think my writing could have that kind of effect on people.
I'm thinking of doing a small collection of stories to continue the tales of Eddie. I think I could take it somewhere interesting.
Most works use Ettins as re-builders or advisers, few go into the mind of one and explore the world through it. What if Ettins aren't happy to be in a position of responsibility and only feign happiness to avoid trouble?
|

sam999
  

|
11/3/2012 | |
Kind of jumping on the bandwagon here, but I also have to say I quite like this. Love some of the visual imagery, such as what the banshee queen must look like being a biomechanical blend of shee, grendel and apparently some kind of butterfly, or the poor shee worker/captives.
Also, the writing style is great and I like the characters. |

Frogman
 
|
11/3/2012 | |
You aren't joining a bandwagon for enjoying something!
Thanks. You people don't know how much this has boosted my confidence as a writer. |

Malkin
     Manager

|
11/3/2012 | |
Very atmospheric and interesting, it's a good twist on the world we know. I'm cautiously looking forward to seeing where you take it, peeking through my fingers. ![[nscared] [nscared]](/images/smilies/emot_scared.gif)
My TCR Norns |

Frogman
 
|
11/3/2012 | |
Thanks again for all the support! I hope I can follow this through!
From the depths of my word processor I bring you more!
Mr Grenorn (whom I do not have a name for) already has a voice in my head. (I think I adore Jason Marsden too much to not imagine his voice as one of the characters in EVERY thing I write...)
Eddie's life has changed to say the least...
A distant murmur catches my attention.
It slowly utters.
“We need you.”
“Me?”
I uncontrollably call back loudly, scanning the area for the source. It’s a wonder I could even hear the voice in the vast sea of cries from the norns and eager Shee.
“Who are you!? Give me a sign!” I shout, hoping they hear me.
My hair is on edge at the moment; I can’t clearly orchestrate a thought, questions flash and dim in my mind like some of the genetic experiments around me do. The world is a blur. My breathing is rapid and irrepressible. Just two moments ago I was on the verge of swallowing a lethal poison.
The loud rattling of chains from behind snaps me out of my trance like state. The sign. I spin around immediately upon realizing this to see only a green pair of claws. This could easily have been me misinterpreting something meaningless. Whatever it
is, it beckons me closer.
“A-Are you? M-me...?” I ask pointing to myself.
My arm is gripped by the creature. Obviously it’s me. They drag me along into the darkness. Something about this leap into the dark seems ominously promising. I can feel their pace pick up instantly and we begin to run. Our pace is unmatchable. Whoever this is, they are fast, my arm is nearly torn by the intensity of their grip. They really do need me...
I have a thousand thoughts I’d like to vocalize to this being but I don’t have the capacity or breath to do so. We haven’t stopped running and are away from the “festivities”. My legs feel like the thunder we sometimes experience. They smack against the hard ground, causing the bones inside to shake.
They don’t seem to have tired out from any of this. I can see more of the beast by now. They have blonde locks and patchy black and white fur. Is he a strange grendel? His green arms are the only thing I can use to indicate his species.
A flurry of coughing erupts from my mouth as my chest tightens from the running. I am not the most athletic ettin. We stop suddenly causing me to lose footing and topple over in a rather pathetic manner.
When I sit back up, I see the face of a civet norn glaring at me. I point at him with a shaky hand. I can only just find the ability to string together one sentence.
“How did you survive...?”
He looks at me as though he’s sick of hearing my question.
“I’m a Grenorn, Ettin. Anything that is touched by Grendel genetics, even if it’s a norn has a chance of surviving. Unfortunately.”
I stare at him, dumbfounded by his statement. Cross breeds of creatures other than Shee were forbidden!
“How do you exist!? Grendel genes are only spliced with Shee these days! “ I shout to him.
I don’t even know his name yet...
“I don’t have time to tell somebody this. We need to go!”
He responds, gesturing me up to my feet. As soon as I stand up he grabs me by the arm again.
This has relieved none of my worries. I’m being dragged to some place by a Grenorn who shouldn’t even exist. Despite this I somehow find my heart racing with anticipation and exitment.
|
 Small Birb
Pann
   

|
11/4/2012 | |
Yay! I'm glad you wrote more! This is a pretty exciting chapter!
Small bird who lives here sometimes, and wanders other times.
Got Creatures related content to share? Submit to Heck Yeah, Creatures!
Icon by gettehld on twitter!
|

Frogman
 
|
11/4/2012 | 1 |
Thanks.
This next chapter is heavy on dialogue. Something I lack experience in. It probably wanes in quality when compared to the previous two chapters.
I cover a long distance traveling with the mysterious Grenorn. I am fuelled by my want for answers and hopes of salvation. I have no idea where he’s taking me or what he wants with me, but it has to be better than pushing a button and hearing screams. My body is tired from all the exertion but I cannot afford to stop.
He stops where a thick forest begins.
“I suppose this is enough distance to not be seen or heard. I better explain myself then... My name is Canis and I believe I have exactly what you want. I need you to help me to get it first though. Over there is a device called “The Warp” I’m quite sure you know a lot more about it than I do... I’ve heard you speak of it enough at least.”
I can feel the blood rush to my face. Has Canis been watching me from afar? How does he know of my desire to escape using the Warp?
“Have you been following me?!” I ask, demanding an answer.
“Eddie, I’ve known about you since you were young. It’s a small world after all...”
He replies his voice is filled with an air of mystery. Or at least it was his attempt at coming off mysterious. It wouldn’t surprise me; ettins are always the subject of gossip. Especially ettins with an affinity for talking about the warp... I do hate my mouth sometimes.
“You’ve probably heard of ‘Eddie the eccentric ettin’ through the grapevine. I don’t know what makes you think that the warp would ever work. First of all you’d a shee to work it out and then you need somebody to test it ou-“
He pushes me toward a blue spiral before I can finish.
“I wouldn’t call you here Eddie if I didn’t already know all of this...”
I fall to the ground from the force he exerts on me.
“What are you doing!?” I shout at him, irritated by his ambiguity. Reveal all indeed!
“Think of yourself as a test subject. I push you through the warp and track you. You escape the world you hate so much and my experiment is a success. If this goes right, it’s a win-win situation.” Cainis answers
It takes a moment to sink in, the possibilities of this proposal. What I risk is my life. But I gain so much more from this decision. My mind races from thought to thought. Cainis looks at me, his facial expression is entirely serious as he stares into my eyes. He really wants me to do this...
“Before I make a decision, sir, I need to ask; why me? Why not some grendel or another ettin?”
I hope his response is clarifying.
“Isn’t it obvious? You talk about the warp all the time, about how you want to live somewhere else and start a new life there.”
His tone is incredulous.
He’s taken everything I’ve said. He’s looked for a creature with the willingness to explore. And from that he has decided that I was perfect for this role. I don’t think he’s going to be too pleased to realize that most of my tirades about the warp and a desire to escape if I could were nothing more than a coping mechanism. I can’t escape! I don’t know where I could end up! I could die, then his little ‘test’ will have gone frighteningly ugly. I could just end up in the office of some Banshee or in a complete wasteland! Canis can’t seriously think for a second that this is a good idea!
“I do speak of the warp a lot, I admit this but... You can’t, no, I can’t do this! “
I cry.
My eyes fill with salty tears. I can’t think straight. It’s the moment I’ve been ranting on about all my life and I don’t even know if I want is anymore...
|

Malkin
     Manager

|
11/4/2012 | |
Wow, such a wild shift in tone from the earlier hopeful chapter! I hope Eddie chooses wisely....
My TCR Norns |

Frogman
 
|
11/5/2012 | |
I've decided to call the collection, Emerge. Simply because something emerges. This is a bit shorter and probably ridden with gramatical errors because I am in college at the moment as I write this and I really, really want to continue on with the story (for the first time in my writing life, I think I may have the guts to finish something...)
Anyway here's the next installement.
"Have you reached a decision yet, ettin?"
Cainis's voice is filled with desperation and a tinge of resentment.
In my vacant thoughts I happen across an oppurtunity to truly look into his eyes. The clear blueness of them almost wills me to trust him. It's as though I can truly see his soul. He can't be that bad if he has the innocent eyes of a child, can he?
He notices my gaze and tries to avert. Have I offended him? Somehow, despite his efforts he resumes staring at me and we share a level of communication that I myself and without a doubt he has not ever experienced before.
His mouth moves as though he's about to say something, but suddenly he he shakes his head again and looks away. Strange...
The decision still runs through my mind, I can't reach a final judgement though...
"Tell me more." I say. "About yourself, about your project. Tell me Cainis, what do you want?"
So he tells me. He tells me a lot of things. About how he was a pet until he got too big for the Banshee to handle him. He recollects the times he saw hundreds of norns and grendels abducted from their homes for selfish purposes and about his desire to go where the anciet ones before us came from. A disc shaped world, where we were free of worry. It tugs me, makes me realize he just wants freedom.
"I'll do it."
I have to. After hearing all this, I can't let him down.
"Really?" He smiles for the first time, his face has a joyus change, but something inside me tells me that all is not well...
My hunch is confirmed when he pushes me into the blue gyre with a psychotic, grendel like laugh.
In the blink of an eye I hit something hard and cold. For a second I completely forget what has just transpired. Then I regroup my thoughs and something hits me harder than the impact of my fall, I just fully and ignorantly believed a whole pack of lies. Like a fool.
I open my eyes to see a freezing white wastland that is completely isolated. There is no sign of any creature, for miles I trunge in slushy snow in search of some kind of life form.
Then, a flash of red darts across the white horizon before me. Upon seeing this, my heart cannot stop thumping... |

Malkin
     Manager

|
11/5/2012 | |
Oh no! Drat those baby blue eyes and their lies!!! Good luck, Eddie...
My TCR Norns |

SpringRain
   
|
11/6/2012 | |
Please, please, please you have to finish this! I can't wait to find out what happens and what the flash of red is in the snowy world. *on tenterhooks*
I know how hard it can be to finish a writing project once started because I posted half a fanfic on here a few years back and I'm STILL trying to finish it.
But what you have so far is amazing! Keep up the good work. Thanks so much for sharing your story on here.
I'm back after 11 years. Holy dooley! |
 Small Birb
Pann
   

|
11/7/2012 | |
Aaagh, curse that grenorn! He tricked us all!
Small bird who lives here sometimes, and wanders other times.
Got Creatures related content to share? Submit to Heck Yeah, Creatures!
Icon by gettehld on twitter!
|
|