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VioletGrendel
  
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Prologue: Kurope
Kurope led the tribe through the jungle soft footed, on the look out for food of any sort. Or, indeed, enemies. His tail thrashed to and fro as he pushed through the foliage that pressed damp against his scales. He blinked his red eyes peered through the thick leaves. A hand tapped him on the shoulder, and he turned irritably. It was Alaqui, a minor female, nervously standing behind him. "What is it?" He asked.
"There is an egg, that way, Kurope. I thought you should know." She pointed to the left. Kurope peered through the leaves, and saw a large yellow egg, almost at the point of hatching, lying beside the mossy trunk of a fallen tree. He headed over to it, the rest of the tribe following it. Kurope stretched out a hand to touch the egg, and heard a frantic scrabbling from within. He turned back to his grendels, who were watching him with hunger in their eyes. He shook his head. "It is too near to hatching for us to eat it." He said.
"What is the creature within, Kurope? It cannot be a grendel." Said Riana, his consort. Kurope nodded. "It is not norn or ettin either. I cannot say what it is. We must wait and see."
As he spoke a crack appeared across the egg's glossy golden surface. The crack spread, and suddenly the egg was in two halves. Crouching between the halves was the strangest creature the grendels had ever seen. It was covered from head to foot in creamy fur, and its snout was long and pointed. Its limbs were long and thin, and it had but three fingers and a thumb on each hand, and four toes on each foot. Its body was long and thin too, and a long thin tail protruded from it. In Kurope's eyes, it was the ugliest creature he had ever seen. He turned away in disgust. "Come on, we're going." He said.
Alaqui murmured "That would be murder."
"And are grendels those to flinch from murder?" Kurope asked her harshly.
"An adult norn, yes, but a hatchling?"
"You take care of it, then, but keep it away from me! It's ugly!"
Alaqui picked up the little creature and cradled it in her arms. "I don't know what you are, my strange dear," She murmured to it. "But you're mine now. You I shall call Athena."
The little creature blinked huge eyes up at her and reached up a hand to finger Alaqui's claws. "Athee!" She cried, happily.
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Chapter 1: Ruins
Rain poured down in heavy sheets, cascading through the leaves and landing heavily on the heads of the little troop of grendels that huddled miserably on the jungle floor. Crouched with them was a peculiar sight. Her fur darkened by the soaking rain, her large eyes blinking with an insatiable curiosity, Athena snuggled tight next to Alaqui, the grendel she thought was her mother. She was having a far worse time of it than the grendels, as her fur became saturated with water, while in simply ran off their burnished scales. Suddenly she jumped up and plucked a leaf from a nearby plant. "What are you doing, Athena?" Asked Alaqui.
"I'm not sure yet." Responded her adopted daughter. She inspected the leaf, and then plucked a few more, weaving them together as she did so. It didn't look like much until she placed it of her head. It resembled nothing so much as a giant plate in shape, but suddenly Athena was no longer being rained on. She grinned with delight, and then had her hat snatched from her head. Kurope placed it on his own head. "Everything belongs to me!" He growled.
Athena was young and small, and no match for the big jungle grendel. She calmly turned away and began making herself another.
Later the rain had stopped, and the troop was wandering through the jungle when Athena spotted something. "I won't be long!" She called to Alaqui, and then scampered off through the still wet leaves.
She ran into a beautiful, haunting place. Moss covered ruins surrounded her, and lizards the colour of jewels scattered at her approach. Leaves hung low over the old stone ruins, as Athena gazed about herself, drinking in the sight. As she looked, she spotted something shining. She knelt down and tugged at it. It came free with a grinding sound, a rusty metal box. Suddenly Athena heard Alaqui calling her. "Athena, we're going!"
No time to open it now. Athena put the box under her arm and ran back to the grendels.
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VioletGrendel
  
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9/25/2014 | |
I've decided something. If you want me to write another chapter, I have to feel someone wants me to. I'll write more on the story if I get some feedback. It doesn't have to be positive, I'd just like to hear your opinions!
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I'm liking it so far, just noticed it today. I'm curious what's in the box. |

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Chapter 2: Anaconda
Moving through the jungle at a relatively slow speed, Athena had time to fiddle with the rusty catches on her box. It was old and stiff, and she was unused to such things, but at last something gave and the box fell apart. The lid fell the the muddy ground with a splotch sound, and she was left holding the other half of the box. It was engraved with mystic signs in a beautiful flowing script, but of course Athena didn't know what it was. However what caught her attention was a pair of long, thin, shining objects that seemed to have escaped the rust and rot of the jungle. They were beautiful. Athena picked one up by a handle at one end and stared at it in fascination. She touched the shiny part with her other hand and yelped in pain. Blood oozed from her finger where she had applied only a slight pressure to it.
Then she heard Kurope's heavy footsteps coming towards her. Quickly she hid the two shiny things in her hat, sliding them into the brim.
"What have you found?" Kurope demanded, towering thickset above her.
"This." She said, showing him the box. He took it, sniffed it, said "Hmph!" And dropped it. Then he returned to the front of the tribe. Suddenly Athena heard a screech of fear. All the grendels span around to face the source of the cry. "Mother!" Screamed Athena, for Alaqui was struggling in the coils of a gigantic, hissing, yellow-green, anaconda!
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11/18/2014 | |
I can see where this is going.... ![[ngrin] [ngrin]](/images/smilies/emot_grin.gif) |

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11/19/2014 | |
Hey, this is a good story so far. I like!
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VioletGrendel
  
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11/19/2014 | |
Thanks!
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Hey, I think you have a good story so far! I'd like to offer some suggestions.
-Incorporate more concrete significant details. Concrete Significant Details are words and phrases that evoke a set image in the reader's imagination. I personally have always had difficulty with this (probably why I like script/playwriting, all that messy detail about what the characters are wearing and how they emote is mostly left up to the director and actors). You've got to remember that the audience can't see the world that you see when you write. You have a fantastic world going on in your head, don't you want to envelop the reader in it?
--A good CSD exercise is to go outside (or just to any basic environment) and observe for a few minutes. Then, go back inside and write a short piece about everything you observed. Sight, smell, taste, sound, touch-all are important
-Describe the actions of your characters. Your characters all have little twitches that make them unique. When Athena sees the box fall open, don't just describe what she notices. Describe how she notices these things. Describe her facial expressions. Likewise, at the beginning, when Kurope turns to notice the female, you can do more than say that he turned irritably. You can describe his exact facial expression and body language, and while you're doing so you can describe what Kurope looks like to the reader.
-Character motivations are the driving force behind any story. Conflict between character wants is the essence of drama. If your character wants something, really think about why they want it. What forces in their past have driven them to this want? Why are they willing to go against the wants of others to get what they want? This is mostly in regards to the first chapter. Think about every action taken. Why are Kurope and the grendels passing through this place? Why do they wait for the egg to hatch? Why does Kurope turn away in disgust from its ugliness, rather than kill it on sight? Why does Alaqui take pity on it, if she is a Grendel who shouldn't care about life or death outside her own species? Why does Kurope permit her to take it in? Why does she name it Athena? This scene can really be explored, and it can help you set up the "rules" of your world. Which brings me to...
-Rules. They are very important in fantasy/sci fi works, which this essentially is. When the majority of your characters are of a non existent, sapient species, you have to establish rules for how this species acts. You have Kurope mention Grendel callousness towards death. What are the cultural expectations of being a Grendel? How do they interact with non Grendel species? How do they find mates, raise children, and find shelter? What are values important to Grendel society? Likewise, you have Athena, a species the grendels do not recognize. Does she know she is another species? How is her species limited biologically in comparison to the Grendel? What benefits does she have over them? How does she interact with Grendels her age? Finally, what the the overarching rules of your world? What threats do the individual species have to worry about? How abundant are different populations? Is there a world outside the jungle, and what do the Grendels think of it? What is the most advanced tech available to someone in this world? What are the reigning belief systems? What are the environmental hazards?
Sorry if this is long or I seem nitpick or something. I just remember putting my work on different websites years ago, and I would have always wanted to receive detailed feedback. I hope it helps you
Do not upset the ugly worm, lest it be a dragon in disguise. (>oo)>
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VioletGrendel
  
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11/20/2014 | |
Thanks, that's nice of you to tell me those things, KC11. Some of the things you mentioned are stuff I often have problems with. Usually I write a story set in a world, and then develop the world afterwards, generally writing a revised draft. Thanks!
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VioletGrendel
  
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Chapter 3: Raid
Athena expected the grendels to run, or attack the anaconda. They did nothing of the sort. Instead they fanned out into a circle and Riana stepped forward. She laid a hand on the anaconda's neck, and snapped to Alaqui "Be still!"
Then she began a soft, murmuring sound at the back of her throat. Her body vibrated with the noise that was almost like song. It rose and fell in her throat, throbbing through the drenched air like a bass drum. Athena listened in astonishment to the sound, unlike anything she had ever heard the grendels make before. She cupped a hand to her ear to better hear the noise.
Now the anaconda loosened its grip on Alaqui, and her face lost its gastly palour, and she could breath once more. The anaconda's neck swayed, and then all of a sudden swept away across the ground and off into the jungle. Riana ceased her song, her face crumpling with sudden weariness, and Kurope strode over to Alaqui, his whole body telling Athena he was enraged. She stepped tentatively towards Alaqui, not wishing to abandon her to Kurope's anger.
"You idiot!" The massive grendel snarled. "You know full well that the Ullasong quiets all reptiles! What do you do? Scream! Exhaust my mate because she must step in for you, and almost kill yourself into the bargain! I'm not having it!" And he struck her across the face.
Athena exclaimed angrily as blood flushed on Alaqui's face, and Kurope turned his rage on her. "You! Get out of my sight, you unnatural changeling! Stay away from me or I swear by the Handish I'll kill you!"
Athena stepped back, fear evident on her long snouted face. Now Kurope turned with tenderness to Riana. "You are not too tired by this?" He asked her.
Riana rose. "No. I am recovered now."
Together the leaders of the tribe walked back to the head of the grendels, and Athena ran to Alaqui. "Mother! Are you alright?" She cried.
Alaqui dragged great lungfuls of air into her lungs. "Yes, Athena, I think so."
Later that day, the grendels halted suddenly. Ahead of them, and a little to the right, could be heard the sound of a body moving through the jungle. Dular, the tracker of the group, said "A messenger from another tribe. He wants to be heard."
Kurope nodded. "We shall see what he has to say."
Athena jigged impatiently from foot to foot, waiting for the messenger to arrive. She had never seen a grendel from another tribe before. Perhaps it would look like her? And, beside that, her insatiable curiosity was burning within her. She had to know what this grendel had to say. She peered ahead into the wetly gleaming leaves.
A form appeared. A grendel, small, and with her claws sheathed to indicate she came in peace. She stopped before Kurope and Riana, and gave a little bow. Athena shook the fur away from her face in keen disapointment. This was just an ordinary grendel.
"What is your message?" Kurope grunted.
"I come with a summons, Lord Kurope," The grendel had a thin, piping voice, and she blinked her eyes uncontrollably as she spoke. "My leader, Jasul, asks for the help of your tribe. He plans a raid on the norn village. It would provide food for both of our tribes for many weeks."
Kurope stood thoughtfully. He passed a hand across his scaled forehead. Riana said softly "It would be of help to us. But can we trust Jasul not to stab us in the back?"
Kurope nodded to her words. At last he glanced around at his tribe. "Tell Jasul," He said. "That I require an exchange of hostages before I trust him. You my take your hostage back with you. Her, over there." And he pointed a claw straight at Athena.
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11/21/2014 | |
Oooo... not as expected.... didn't expect it to turn out quite like that. I like being surprised. |

VioletGrendel
  
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11/23/2014 | |
Its not finished - I had to quit in the middle of writing the chapter. I'm finishing it now.
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VioletGrendel
  
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11/25/2014 | |
Chapter 4: Jasul's Tribe
Alaqui leapt to Athena's side. "Not Athena!"
Kurope strode over to them. "Silence! You have angered me already once today! I shall be glad to be rid of her."
Athena said quietly "I should like to go. It would be - interesting. And I'll come back mother! Don't worry!"
The little messanger waited impatiently,blinking her green lids over blazing red eyes.
Alaqui had tears in her eyes, but it was obvious that Kurope had latched onto the idea. She hugged Athena tightly, and then Kurope pushed her towards the messanger. "Go and irritate Jasul instead!" He grunted.
The messanger stood on tiptoe and grabbed hold of Athena's hand. "Come on!" She piped.
Athena nodded, and began to walk. She turned and waved to ALaqui, and then plunged deep into the jungle foliage.
It took several hours to reach the place where Jasul's tribe waited, and the messanger wasn't talkative, but Athena was anything but bored. She gazed about with her massive pools of eyes, drinking in everything around her. They were passing out of Kurope's land now, this was unfammiliar jungle. In some places plants she had not seen before sprouted, and once she saw a rhino beetle scuttle away from her, its yellow carapace glistening, its horn shimmering black. She munched on a mushroom as they walked, and began to hiccup a little. At last the messanger turned to her, twitching and blinking, and told her irritably to hold her breath or drink some water. Athena nodded and sucked a deep breath of waterladen air into her lungs and held it until her hiccups ceased. And then they reached Jasul's tribe.
It happened suddenly. One minute they were striding through jungle, the next they walked into a clearing filled with about eight grendels. Athena paused, nervously, and the messanger marched up to the largest, twitched nervously before him, and said "Kurope agrees, but only if you exchange hostages with him. This is his hostage." And she pointed at Athena.
Jasul walked over to examine her. He sniffed his large nose and tugged at her fur. Athena bore it silently. She did not know Jasul, but she feared that he might be even more short tempered than Kurope.
"Hmph. Go back then with Flinar. He will do as a hostage for Kurope."
"Yes Jasul." Said the messanger. A weedy grendel who must be Flinar followed her as she went into the jungle in the direction she had come.
"You," Said Jasul. "What's your name?"
"Athena."
"Well, Athena, you keep quiet and don't bother me and you'll get back to your tribe safe and sound, you hear me? Good. Now keep out of the way. I don't know what you are, and I don't care, but you are even uglier than a kobold!"
Athena nodded, and approached the other grendels warily. She didn't know what her reception would be like. They welcomed her with silence. Oh well. She had things to notice, and think about.
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VioletGrendel
  
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12/18/2014 | |
Is anyone still interested in this story? I'm not going to keep writing it unless someone is!
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12/18/2014 | |
Sorry, I get easily distracted, but, yup, still interested. I forgot to respond earlier...
*rereads new part of story*
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VioletGrendel
  
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12/19/2014 | |
Thanks mea. I get easily discouraged if no one likes my stories . . .
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Chapter 5: Journey to the Norn Village
A few days passed. Jasul kept his tribe constantly on the move, taking his grendels steadily through the jungle. Athena was not hard put to keep up. Her long legs put her in very good stead for walking and she stayed near the front of the tribe until Jasul said "Don't stand there! You're getting your shadow where I'm trying to see," He looked at her thoughtfully for a moment. "Are you any good at climbing trees?"
Athena answered honestly "I don't know. I've never tried."
"Try now."
Athena nodded. She looked up at a low moss covered branch above her head. She lifted her arms and jumped. She caught hold of the branch with her fingers and almost before she knew what she was doing she had pulled her legs up and stood upon the branch, grinning down at the grendels below. She felt a delighted exhilaration at the ease with which she had pulled herself up, while a small corner of her mind filed away this information for use when Kurope was angry with her.
"Good! You see those fruit up there?" Jasul called.
Athena nodded, looking up to see several small round nodules of a pale yellow-green colour hanging above her head.
"Throw them down to us."
Athena nodded again, turned round so that she could reach the fruit easier, and reached up to touch one. It was smooth and hard and slippery. She had difficulty getting her grip on it at first. She swayed, finding it hard to balance and pull at the same time. And then she remembered her prehensile tail. When playing with young grendels when she was a child, Athena had often made them run away screeching when her tail had twisted and she had used it like a hand. Grendels just didn't do that. Their tails were clubs, scaly spiked things to be used in battle, and Athena had gradually stopped using her tail as an extra limb. Now however Athena stuck it out behind her and twisted it tightly around the trunk of the tree, to exclamations from the grendels below.
Now she could balance properly. She reached out and picked all the fruit, throwing them down as she did so. Then she slid down the trunk and landed lightly on the ground. Jasul had gathered the fruit together in a pile and was holding a leaf twisted a certain way so that it made a basket. He was putting the fruit into it, stacking them carefully.
Deferentially Athena asked "What are the fruit?"
Jasul glanced up with a start as though he had forgotten she was there. "Paintberries." He said.
The day after Athena had gathered the paintberries, which Jasul still carried in his basket, the tribe halted at the centre of a particularly thick clump of undergrowth. Jasul put down his berries and said "Right! The Norn Village is just over there. No one is to leave this thicket until I give the order! Is that understood? You," he pointed at Athena. "Will stay here throughout the battle. Here. Is that understood?"
Athena nodded.
"Good. Now, while we wait for Kurope, we will use the paintberries. Dithos, the tools!"
A thin, elderly looking grendel with scales tinged grey took out three wooden bowls, a few chunks of interesting coloured earth and a stone from under one of his large chest scales. "Here Jasul!" He wheezed.
Jasul took them and divided the berries equally into the three bowls. He began to pound them methodically, while everyone craned over to look. The berries soon mashed into a formless, colourless pulp. Jasul sniffed it and looked pleased. Then he crumbled reddish earth into the left bowl, bluish into the centre bowl and yellowish into the right bowl. He gave a bowl each to two grendels, and they set about mixing them until the colour was evenly distributed. Then all the grendels lined up before Jasul. He marked their foreheads with yellow, their tails with red and their chests with blue. When it was done he looked at them and grinned. "My army." He said proudly.
And then there came a sound in the vegetation and some grendels that Athena recognised trooped in, led by a large and burly grendel.
"Where have you been Kurope?!" Demanded Jasul.
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VioletGrendel
  
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12/19/2014 | |
Longest chapter yet I think! 
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the1whoscreams
  
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12/19/2014 | |
Looking awesome! |
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You've quite a knack for writing, you know!
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VioletGrendel
  
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12/20/2014 | |
Thanks both of you!
TrellyDawn, thank you for saying that. I want to be an author one day.
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12/20/2014 | |
Loving the story!
"For small creatures such as we, the vastness is bearable only through love."
"We are a way for the cosmos to know itself." - Carl Sagan |

VioletGrendel
  
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12/21/2014 | |
Thank-you evolnemesis!
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12/29/2014 | |
Chapter 6: Norns
Alaqui rushed to Athena's side. "Are you okay Athena?"
"I'm fine mother!" Said Athena, giving Alaqui a hug. "I've found out I can climb."
Alaqui looked a little puzzled at this remark, a line over her forehead crinkling, but she forged on. "I was so worried about you."
Athen smiled reassuringly. "I enjoyed myself!"
"Be quiet!" Snapped Kurope. When Athena and Alaqui stopped and glanced at him he turned back to Jasul and said "So it's larger than it was last time?"
"It's doubled in size. Also there's a rough palisade. It will burn easily enough though. The stupid idiots tried to make it hard to climb by greasing it."
Kurope gave a short sharp bark of laughter. "I have always maintained that fur makes a creature stupid."
"That's as may be. Anyhow, if you are on this side of the village and we on the other and we both move in at once setting fire to the palisade . . ."
Kurope nodded. "I agree with your plan. The hostages must stay here however."
Jasul nodded. "Yes. They will."
Athena stood watching as the grendels crept out of the thicket and away to surround the village. Beside her stood the weedy little grendel who was Kurope's hostage. Athena stared after the raiders, wishing she could go with them. Curiosity was knowing at her like a worm in an apple. She sat down and began playing with what was left of the paint, drawing a caricature of Kurope in one of his blackest moods. She showed it to her companion who laughed in a high, sharp, almost nervous manner. "He is very vicious your leader."
"I agree."
"How did you ever get into his tribe?"
"He was in a permissive mood and Alaqui took a fancy to me. I was only a baby at the time. She saw me hatch."
"What are you anyway? I've never seen such a peculiar creature before."
Athena did not take offence. She was used to being called a freak. "I'm a grendel." She said.
At this point they heard the crackle of flames, and some shrill screeches. "What do these norns look like anyway?" Athena wondered.
"Furry with large eyes." Said the grendel dismissively.
Their came now grendel warcries and Athena could stand it no longer. "I'm going to look!" She said, getting up and heading to the exit of the thicket.
"You'll get into trouble if you're seen!" Warned the grendel.
"I won't be seen." Athena assured him. She remembered her newfound skill and climbed up into the branches.
They were relatively easy to navigate. Many of them were massively wide, and plants and branches jutted off everywhere. She worked her way along a branch, reached out and caught another and then lay flat on it and peered down. A scene of mayhem met her eyes. Flames licked up a blackened fence and several huts also burned merrily. Some creatures that reminded her vaguely of the way she herself looked were fighting the grendels running all over the compound, but they were wildly outnumbered. They were a pleasant brown in colour, with large ears, small nubbins of horns on their heads and small tails. Some had golden hair, while others brown cut in a sort of mane. Some, she noted with interest, carried some sort of artificial claws.
Suddenly she was reminded of the peculiar things she had secreted in her hat what seemed so long ago now. She reached up into the now wilting object, and felt their handles. She slid them out and looked at them. They were like the artificial claws, but longer, and they glistened in a way the others that the norns held did not. She held one in each hand and looked down and was completely oblivious to the other in the tree who climbed up behind her.
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I wonder who climbed up the tree behind her... ![[nsurprised] [nsurprised]](/images/smilies/emot_surprised.gif) |

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Chapter 7: The Heart of the Jungle
She clutched tight to her branch in fascination. She had never seen norns before. They were furred, like her, but that was where the resemblance ended. She was tall and thin and hardly made a sound at all when she walked. These creatures were short and stocky, and she could hear their feet padding as they ran too and fro below her. She spotted Alaqui, standing in the door of a hut and holding something brown and lumpy over one shoulder while she fought norns who tried to take it from her. One norn came in low and tried to cut at her legs. That was a mistake. Alaqui kicked upwards with one of her massive clawed feet and the norn stumbled backwards, bleeding.
Kurope was in the centre of the fray, roaring in his deep voice, lithe Riana at his side as together they engaged with a norn who wore a helmet made from the polished shell of a rhino beetle. The norn carried the biggest blade Athena had seen yet, it matched her own in length but it was far rougher and cruder, and it was rusted in several places. The norn leapt and twirled, battling the two massive jungle grendels. He was far faster than either, although it was obvious that if they caught him he would be dead. He ducked down and nicked Kurope's leg beneath a scale, and Riana shouted wordlessly in rage and swept a massive claw at the norn who had dared harm her mate. He stepped back but not quick enough, and fell beneath Riana's claws. He was dead a moment later.
Very, very softly something tickled Athena's neck. Expecting some sort of insect she lifted her hand and felt in her fur for the creature. Then she froze. She touched cold metal.
A high pitched voice said "Move and you're dead."
Athena lay as still as death.
"Good. You're with the grendels aren't you."
"Yes." Athena said, trying not to let her fear show in her voice.
"Good. Then you can come with me. Sit up. Slowly!"
Athena did as she was bid and an arm whipped round her neck, holding the dagger against the front of her throat now. The being holding the knife to her throat said "Follow me." And she felt it descend down the tree a little way. Athena did likewise, slipping down the thick trunk to the ground. The blade slipped round and now prodded her in the back. "Move!" Said her captor, and Athena momentarily considered running or shouting for help, but either would result in her being stabbed before she could get to the grendels, she realised belatedly. She began to walk, pushing her way through undergrowth as the knife jabbed at the hollow of her back.
At last the voice behind her said "Alright stop."
Athena stood still. They were in a clearing a long way from the norn village. The floor was covered in a soft litter of leaves, and to the right a trail of leafcutter ants wended its way over the ground.
"Sit down." Said the voice. Athena did as she was bid, and the knife holding being at last emerged into her site. She was a norn, shoulder length golden hair tangled with leaves and the fur on her brow matted a dark brownish red colour. She looked Athena up and down, and Athena looked her up and down too. Athena said when she had looked her fill "Why did you take me here?"
The norn said "Well put it this way: I want help."
Athena laughed. "A strange way of asking for it. Marching me through the forest with a knife at my back. You could have just asked."
"And you would have said no. You are allied to the grendels for the Handish's sake!"
Athena shrugged. "Not to the leader of my tribe I'm not. Or to most of the others come to that. My mother is the only grendel I care about. Or who cares about me."
"Your mother was no grendel!" Said the norn, incredulity showing on her face. "You're some sort of mutant Banshee, that's why I want you. Listen," She leaned conspiratorially forward. "I don't know if you know or not, but in the centre of this forest there lies a spaceship. It crashed here three years ago. No one dares go near because a Banshee guards it. There is said to be a fabulous treasure within, and if you help me get in, you can have half of it."
Athena paused for a moment, thinking. The norn had told her a lot more in that sentence than she probably knew. Whatever spaceships were, people at least similar to herself used them. And besides, talk of a fabulous treasure intrigued her. To her mind it could only either be a massive store of food or a new and brilliant weapon, either of which would get her into Kurope's good books once she returned.
"What is your name?" She asked the norn.
"Rusil."
"Then, Rusil, I Athena of Kurope's tribe will help you!"
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Chapter 8: Who Am I?
The two of them trekked through the forest, under the leaves. A kobold screeched at them from the undergrowth, and rain dripped from the sky. Athena rubbed her forehead and yawned. She was tired. A lot had happened in one day. There had been the paintberries, the battle at the village, and her meeting with Rusil. She kept her twin swords out all the time. Rule One of the jungle: Never trust anyone not of your own tribe. And Rusil wasn't even a grendel! Athena rubbed her forehead with the back of her hand. A flea bit her and she plucked it out of her fur and squashed it. The other grendels never got fleas. Presumably because they didn't have fur.
Ahead of her Rusil glanced back. "Come on!" He said.
"Yees!" Athena said, and caught up with him.
Morning dawned a week later to see two travellers, a norn and a being who thought she was a grendel, sleeping in a clearing. Over them leaned a metallic robot on tracks. Its sensors marked them clearly as intelligent life forms. Its master's instructions were clear. Take them to him. Its metal claws reached down to take hold of them.
Athena screamed as she awoke. Something was holding her tightly around the middle. She saw it as she woke, and almost lost consciousness again. It was massive, the size of a small tree. This megalith was made entirely in metal, and it had both her and Rusil clasped in gigantic metal claws. She beat against it with her hands, feet and tail, screaming profanities that only one who has lived all one's life with grendels can possibly know. Rusil stabbed at it with his dagger, but the blade bent on its metal hide. The thing said in a monosyllabic voice that had the sound of grinding gears behind it "Lifeforms - must - be - subdued - if - they - prove - violent."
It produced some sort of tiny needle and stabbed it into Athena's shoulder. She yelled again and beat at it, but she felt a slow drowsiness coming over her. She fought it, and the metal beast as it rolled away with them over the jungle floor, but it was winning out. She cast a despairing look at Rusil, who was obviously succumbing too, and then she lost consciousness.
A hand was touching her shoulder. A scaly hand. For a moment Athena thought it was a grendel, and then she felt the fingers. There were three of them. Long and thin. They resembled nothing so much as her own! She jerked upright, and found herself looking into the eyes of a creature who could be almost her double. The only difference was that he was larger than her, and clearly elderly, and he had scales instead of fur, and his eyes were red like grendel eyes.
"Who are you?!" Athena demanded.
"Now that is what I should be asking you," He said, withdrawing his hand. She noted now that he wore a long blue gown of some material very fine material, and two blades identical to her own were sheathed at his belt, one on either hip. An array of interesting looking devices were attached to this belt. "I'm Ukgokar. I'd like to know what a young shee is doing on this forsaken planet? And with a pair of banshee swords to boot!"
"B-banshee swords? Young shee? What are you talking about? I'm Athena, a grendel of Kurope's tribe."
He shook his head. "You're no more a grendel than I'm a log of wood. But you haven't answered my question."
Athena shook her head. "What is this place? What was the - thing?"
"The service robot? It was looking for intruders. I do not like norns and grendels interrupting my work. But you - you are something different. I want to know how you got here."
"I was born here! And - what did you do with Rusil?"
"The norn? I destroyed him. I don't like norns."
Athena was more disturbed for her own safety than she worried about Rusil. True, they had been companions, but there had been no mutual trust, and she had in fact disliked the norn. And a harsh grendel upbringing had not made her soft. She was hard inside, and not squeamish. "But where am I? And why have you brought me here?"
"This is my ship. I repaired much of it, but the hyperdrive is broken forever. I can't get off this planet. I brought you here because I am curious about you."
Athena gazed about her surroundings. She was in an entirely metal room, on a couch. She did not recognise any of the things around her. She had never even been in a hut before, and certainly hadn't seen furniture. Wonder filled her mind as she looked around, but she did not forget her immediate situation. "I came for the treasure." She said at last.
Ukgokar burst into peals of laughter. Athena pent up her annoyance for later. It would not do to anger him, when he had weapons and she none. "The treasure! That's so rich! There's plenty of treasure here, Athena. But none you would want. Electrical, all of it." And he laughed again.
"What do you mean?"
"It's useless without me. When I die it will rust and rot and fall to pieces." Suddenly he was sober. He said "Look. You're a damn shee, and everyone knows banshee and shee don't like each other. But you're the only being on this planet that could understand this thing. Stay with me. I'll teach you about it, and maybe one day you'll manage to mend the hyperdrive. Who knows."
Athena knew he was talking absolute rubbish. There was no such thing as most of the things he was on about. "No." She said.
"No?!" He was amazed that she had turned him down.
"No. I am a grendel! Not whatever you keep insisting I am!" And suddenly Athena lunged. Wherever this Ukgokar was from, it didn't build the reflexes and speed you needed in the jungle. He hardly moved before she had his swords out of their scabbards and at his throat. She held them there, unwaveringly. "You will make sure your beasts do not harm me," She said. "And I won't hurt you."
He nodded, his eyes wide.
"Good. I won't take your treasure. You didn't kill me when you could have. I'll do you a favour in return." She held one sword at his throat, while she gestured with the other that he sit down against the wall. He did as he was told. She tugged at his gown. It tore easily one way, but was near breakable the other. She tore two long strips of it, and used them to tie his wrists and ankles to a cable that ran along the bottom of the wall. And then she took up her swords. "Goodbye." She said, and ran out of the room. His shocked red eyes followed her out.
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