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 scoota94   |
This is a little something I thought of. If anyone wants me to make a full story out of it let me know!  Edit: This is the preface written on 18\12\09 Preface It was a cool spring evening. The winds blew gently and caressed the leaves of a nearby tree. The wet grass harboured many glow worms and, as they slid along, the ground looked similar to the sky, with its twinkling stars. The peaceful scene was washed away as an ettin, wearing a large backpack ran past. Behind him a green beast with glowing red eyes followed getting closer with every step. "Go away you damned grendel!" the ettin screamed fearfully but this only encouraged his hunter. "Grind et eetn" the beast snarled frightfully. As a final resort the ettin threw its backpack at the beast and continued running. The large box-like structure slammed into the grendel with a large thud! "Darg frag nite" the beast muttered as he stood up only to realise the ettin was long gone. crack. The grendel jumped as a noise erupted from the box. Cautiously the grendel crept up to the box and opened the lid. He was greeted by an oval object, which was wriggling. The egg had beautiful patterns on it. Rainbow lines drenched the egg and highlighted the cracks. The grendel, not a creature to appreciate art, was delighted at the prospect of a fine meal and reached its scaly claws toward the wriggling mass. The top of the egg flew off suddenly but this did not deter the beast and he wrenched the hatchling from its warm alcove. Naturally the baby was terrified, coming into this new world to be met by the red eyes of hell. A shrill scream erupted from the norns throat but this only made the grendel sneer evily. About to take the first bite, the grendel, jumped as a bolt of forked lightning hit the ground nearby. Droplets of rain started to fall quickly and the grendel screeched. Dropping the norn he ran of, tail between his legs. The norn, now a shaking mass of fur, took a few moments to register what happened. After a minute in the rain, the small creature crawled into his egg shell and stared fearfully out into the storm. What do you think?  Edit: Ok review peoples! Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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 sam999  |
Quite good. |
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 Melody |
I like it.  |
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scoota94 |
Do you think I should continue it? and thanks for nice comments!Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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 Malkin Manager |
Wow, this is nice.  I like the imagery you've used with the egg. You might want to use some more paragraph breaks to make it easier to read, though? Please continue!!!! My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
Ok I've decided to make this preview a preface! I'll update the preface then work on chapter 1. I hope to get chapter 1 finito by christmas (maybe on christmas for those who want a pressie!) EDIT: I have decided to upload chapters to www.fanfiction.net I will let you know the exact url when I upload chapter 1 Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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scoota94 |
I have just come up with an idea! I want this story to be more communal so heres the plan. I ask, for example, the name of the story and you all come up with idea's and I pick my favourite! Of course I already have a title but hows this... Post your idea for the name and breed of the main character (which is the norn from the preface) I will pick from your posts! Please bear in mind that just because I picked the name you suggested does not mean I will pick the breed and vice versa! thanks and send those posts!P.S. The breed must be from creatures 2. For you C3 lovers don't worry I may have a future plan "wink wink" Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Melody |
How about a Hebe norn named Gary? |
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scoota94 |
Quite like Hebe norns so definately taking that into consideration! By the way, this idea's round ends on the 23rd of december! so be quick! Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Malkin Manager |
Socrates. My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
Not so sure bout tht but will think about it Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Malkin Manager |
Come on, man, it's Socrates! XD My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
The link you posted isnt working! There will be a twist in the first chapter which will lead to levels of intelligents like socrates was... Ooops!  I said too much! oh wellP.S. the norn is a male Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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 Tea Queen Laura |
Very nice - I love your descriptive imagery, and all your little details. It really paints a picture. Do you write often? It seems like it, keep it going! |
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scoota94 |
 thanks for all your support everyone! Unless there is more posts for the name and breed it seems like it will be a Hebe norn called Gary. Quite like Gary Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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scoota94 |
Ok the story (drumroll...) Is now officialy upload to the net! WOOHOO! Here is the link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5595008/1/A_Norns_Tale Congrats melody!!! The main character is now called Gary and is also a Hebe norn! EDIT: well I was thinking about the future of this story and decided to edit the preface... You see it was an ettin in the preface but this is set in albia before ettins were created and it would be good for the rest of the story so please reread the preface at the above link thanks! Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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scoota94 |
Hey all! Sorry for the wait (Its christmas after all lol) But just to say... Chapter 1 is now up!!! Merry Christmas! Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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 SpringRain |
Thank you for such a great story! keep writing more! Lol. <3 I'm back again after being away a handful of years. 2026 Revamp, Baby! |
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scoota94 |
Ok so there will be a female emerald norn but not so sure on names so any suggestions? Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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 Officer-1BDI |
Katia! *totally didn't just finish the second Professor Layton game* >_> And I'm loving the story so far. I can't wait to read chapter 2. You have to be honest with yourself when you are writing. If that leads to somewhere unexpected then perhaps you really needed to go there. -- Jim Adkins |
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scoota94 |
By the way is it pronounced katy-a or Kat-e-a? Edit:Well I like the name! so unless there is more suggestions it seems like I will choose that!Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Malkin Manager |
Kaat-ee-ya. I love the caring relationship you built with Gary and the Shee in so short a space... and Boo to Ruckon! He should be a Banshee, he's so mean!  My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
Okay thanks! Well I've read the stories about the lone shee and he seemed like a kind person but the shee seemed kinda evil! Hope I don't offend shee lovers but the lone shee stories say that they laughed at the lone shee's reations and every story needs a baddy right? EDIT:chapter 2 is now up! I've never worked on a piece of writing this long before! P.S, The female is called Katia Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Officer-1BDI |
Yay! I read the second chapter. I was a little thrown because you kept switching between first and third person (unless there's a third norn in there with Gary and Katia), but overall I really liked it! You have to be honest with yourself when you are writing. If that leads to somewhere unexpected then perhaps you really needed to go there. -- Jim Adkins |
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Malkin Manager |
Ah, so to your Shee, morality gets in the way of scientific experiments? Who was that mysterious third Shee? Why are all the Shee male? Why did the Lone Shee make Gary and Katia so longlived? Go the Lone Shee! My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
Officer-1BDI:well in the first chapter I used third person because Gary was a baby and he was not highly intelligent. After the experiments he became more intelligent and aware of himself Malkin:Wow tons of Questions there! Well the way I have depicted the shee is that are willing to do anything for science! I guess I should have given the 3rd shee a name but that will come later, in the story there are probably around 10 or so shee. I'm sorry that I have'nt mention any female shee but I didnt write that the 3rd one was male (don't worry ladies you won't be left out ) and finally if you read the end of chapter 2 carefully you'll notice the lone shee says ''they'' instead of me meaning he has nothing to do with the ''evil'' experiment (he has no moral issues) I am thinking of writing a diary of the lone shee in between chapters! E.G. chapter 1a would be first entry... so there you have it!Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Malkin Manager |
I can't remember seeing a female Shee in Creatures fanfiction, though I haven't read every fanfic yet. "Brethren" often implies only males, though? Oops, sorry - I didn't catch that the other Shee had changed Gary and Katia's DDNA post-capture. Looking forward to the next chapter!My TCR Norns |
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scoota94 |
Cool so my fic might be the first to feature female shee? Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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Officer-1BDI |
I've seen female Shee in other stories, but that was AGES ago; ever since the Lone Shee popped up the entire gender almost seems to have fallen off the face of Albia. Your story will definitely be one of the first ones to feature them in a while. As for the first/third person bit, I wasn't referring to you switching between chapters, but switching within chapter 2. Specifically this part: A large, windowless door shuddered then opened to reveal a group of three shee, two of them Ignus and Ruckon. The sight of these tall blue creatures made me remember snippets of shattered memories. I crouched low and stared fearfully at the shee. "Lets check subject A" the shee with no name suggested hastily and Gary could see why. Ignus's eyes were shooting daggers at Ruckon, who himself, was giving one of those 'If looks could kill' glares. "OK then, come subject A" Ruckon commanded. Gary watched as the she-norn walked slowly to the head shee. Emphasis mine. I was just thrown off because the tense changed within one paragraph. You have to be honest with yourself when you are writing. If that leads to somewhere unexpected then perhaps you really needed to go there. -- Jim Adkins |
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scoota94 |
Oops Well I'm not that experienced with writing and have not done many first person stories so I seem to have trouble sticking with it I'll sort that... EDIT:I have decided to completely redo the story as I am not quite happy about where this is going, so here is the new explaination: Albia. The ancient disk world. Its surface wore the scars of many handish years. Of course time measurement was a debatable theory! There was Nornish and Handish! Many years ago, after albia had been created by the great hand Steve, the shee were created. In turn these shee created Norns and grendels. The shee and the upper class Norns lived in prosperous surroundings in the nornir settlement, while the shunned grendels live in their jungle. The lower class Norns, who were less intelligent than upper, live in various locations across albia. The mythical hand creatures have not been sighted for generations and remain largely forgotton! The languages spoken varied from nornish, bibble, and handish. The handish language was adopted by the shee while all other creatures spoke either nornish or bibble. Of course some upper class Norns speak handish! Life is peaceful until it appears the grendels are becoming more daring! What are they plotting and can everyone be trusted? The Story is completely restarted now! I hope you don't mind but I was not really happy about the plot ![:\](/images/smilies/confused.gif ":\") Don't be worried about who is right, Just follow you heart... |
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