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LoverIan

LoverIan
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  7/28/2009

I am currently trying to write this, with a semi-case of writer's block. Oh, and a semi lack of sleep.

I like the garbage dump metaroom so, I thought I'd make a little story.

NOTE: This is not my best story so far (Considering all my writing I've done in my life). This is also in a way fan fic of what happened when the Shee came across the Toxic dump room.

The shee currently had a semi-hectic schedule.

What, with all of the current events, discovering the toxic norns, in a strange place.

They could NOT survive.

No matter where he placed them in.

No matter what they ate.

No matter what they did.

They couldn't live long enough, their life spans too short, malnutrition, and other problems cause their death.

He had done almost everything possible.

Vaccinations, normal, frequent, and CONSTANTLY.

Enhanced diet.

Sprays to kill bugs.

Differant living enviroments.

Almost everything he could think of. Right now he was having tea, thinking of all the possibilities.

The strangest part was, the new norns seemed to hate the vaccinations and spraying.

"But, that's what keeps most norns from dying!" The shee outbursted, spilling his tea onto a nearby norn, it screaming in pain from the hot tea.

"DANGER DANGER,
WARNING WARNING,
A NEW WARP DESTINATION HAS BEEN FOUND, ADVISE CAUTION"
-An alarm announced.

The Shee had no time to apologize, the shee grabbed the norn by it's hand, and led it to the warp gate.

The norns friends, seeming to gasp, they had something to show the shee, and their friend, the one they had chosen to tell the shee, had been taken.

These norns feared that they would never see said friend again.....

Meanwhile....

The Shee was now preparing the warp gate. He had prepped the norn, it was in the holding cage, alone, with a security cam, which would survey the progression of the norn.

The shee pulled a switch, and then went back to the comm room.

The shee sat down, watching, as the warp gate had turned on, and the norn was whisked to this new world.

In said world....

This norn.... just a normal, average norn....

(Non-garbage type of course, since the shee was trying to breed them so that he could get a genetic sample so that eggs could be layed by muco)

..... was afraid, it didn't know what was going to happen, what this place was, or where the shee was.

The shee used the controls, moving the security camera to watch the norn.

The norn moved forward, trying to explore this new place. It saw a jelly like creature, and poked it. Upon poking, the creature ran away, and the norn began to feel sick.

The norn began to cough violently.

The shee, and the norns surrounding him, all gasped.

The norn kept walking forward, feeling weaker, as if dying. It whined, voice hoarse.

The shee was perplexed by this matter. The norns began to whimper, fearing for the worse.

The norn, feeling so tired and weak, moved to a small area. The norn lied down, feeling as if he was about to die, he looked up at the stars, whimpering.

The norns cried for their friend, knowing he was about to die. The shee, felt sorry for this norn, but knew it was in the pursuit of science. The shee would send the others into the new place next.

Much later, MUCH LATER (After the other norns had died).....

The shee, still confused, wondered how this world could be so deadly. The shee put on a suit of some sort, it keeps out toxins, and went into the warp.

Later....

The shee had explored, finding it was a fairly sized room, but unsafe for life.

After going to the comm room to relax, the shee noticed something, the toxic norns, so fragile, we heading over to the warp.

The shee gasped, and got up to stop them, the shee then noticed it was too late.

The reason was, the corpses of the norns, had been analyzed. There was no cure at all for the norns ailments. Not to mention, once a norn had entered the warp, they were good as dead.

The shee watched the cameras, and watched the norns vitals, a norn, near death, was now quickly returning to full health.

"So I guess, this is where they belong?" The shee said.

From now on, the shee had decided, the toxic norns would live ONLY here.

~THE END~

I know it was long, I hope you all enjoyed it.


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Laura
Tea Queen

Laura


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  7/28/2009

Aw, what a sad ending. Those poor Norns! :(

Still, I like your take on how the Garbage Dump could've been discovered. Well done for an insightful and enjoyable read. :)

 
LoverIan

LoverIan



  7/28/2009

Thanks Laura! Your feed back was kind!

I know it was sad, but, like many animals, they died in the pursuit of science or is it the name of science?

I thought about making it funnier, the shee kicking the first norn into the warp.

Here's the ironic part:
The norns were trying to speak to the shee about NOT using norns as test subjects, and they all ended up dying as test subjects.

Also, the Shee never found out what they wanted to tell him.


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Moe

Moe


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  7/28/2009

Oh neat. :D Good job!
 
Malkin

Malkin

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  7/28/2009

I love how it's 'how the toxic norns got their home' - like How the Elephants got their Nose. :)

My TCR Norns
 
LoverIan

LoverIan



  7/28/2009

Thanks everyone for the feedback.

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Laura
Tea Queen

Laura


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  7/29/2009

You're welcome nornloverian - credit where it's due! :)

Ah Malkin, I used to love those tales when I was little, I found them fascinating.

 
LoverIan

LoverIan



  7/30/2009

Aww, thanks. You deserve a cookie for kindness!

Yah, those stories are always cute!


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Laura
Tea Queen

Laura


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  7/30/2009

Wouldn't it be fun if someone was to write tales like that, but about Creatures - "How the Astro Norn Got Its Stars", or "How the Siamese Norn Got Its Whiskers" or something. :P
 
LoverIan

LoverIan



  7/30/2009

Well the astro norn was a success of messing with a chi chi norn's genetics, but it'd be a cute story.

It would be cool, I also think I'm addicted to making these stories, I posted another, more morbid in a way.


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Officer-1BDI

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  8/1/2009

Not to detract from your lovely story, but edash actually wrote an origins story for the Garbage Dump when it was first released.

This is a nice alternative, though, especially since your version actually involves norns. :)


You have to be honest with yourself when you are writing. If that leads to somewhere unexpected then perhaps you really needed to go there.
-- Jim Adkins

 
LoverIan

LoverIan



  8/1/2009

I know there was already a story, that's my point, this is like a fanfic or an idea.

Thanks. Good luck on your agent!


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Yamishi

Yamishi



  10/30/2009

This was a good story. But the poor Norns all died. :'(
 


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